Some believe that the government should not be responsible for combating environmental issues that the international companies should take the mantle. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

There are
people
that
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belive
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believe
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environmental issues are not the
government
's responsibility and
the
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that
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international
companies
should take a step
to
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toward
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it. In
this
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we will discuss both perspectives before
conclude
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it. On the one hand, some
people
argue that only the
government
who responsible for environmental issues in their countries. The
government
have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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to make
regulation
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regulations
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about
environment
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the environment
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and take preventive ways to
avoid
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prevent
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people
from damaging the
environment
such
as
prohibited
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prohibiting
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deforestry,
avoid
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avoiding
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wildfire
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wildfires
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and
save
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saving
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biodiversity.
Moreover
, the
government
also
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is also
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responsible
to overcome
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the
damages
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damage
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in
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to
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the
environment
and
educate
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people
to
perserve
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preserve
the
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nature.
On the other hand
, many international
companies
build their factories in a foreign country and contribute to the
pollutions
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pollution
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and
environment
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environmental
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damages
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damage
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in other countries. It is
undoudtedly
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undoubtedly
that some international
companies
damage
the
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nature to open their lands and mines.
For instance
, in Papua, Indonesia, there are many mining
companies
that open their mines by deforestry and
abondon
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abandon
abandoned
it once they
finished
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. These irresponsible ways
are
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cause
many
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harm
for
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the
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apply
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nature and it is a necessity for the company to take
a
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part in handling
environment
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environmental
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issues.
To conclude
, both the
government
and international
companies
that open their factories in these countries should be responsible for
environment
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the environment
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.
This
is
due to
the fact that
the
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international
companies
often cause
damages
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damage
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in
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to
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foreign
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a foreign
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country
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countries
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and
abondon
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abandon
the lands.
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