Some believe that the government should not be responsible for combating environmental issues that the international companies should take the mantle. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?
There are
people
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
belive
environmental issues are not the Correct your spelling
believe
government
's responsibility and the
international Correct determiner usage
that
companies
should take a step to
it. In Change preposition
toward
this
essay
we will discuss both perspectives before Add a comma
essay,
conclude
it.
On the one hand, some Change the verb form
concluding
people
argue that only the government
who responsible for environmental issues in their countries. The government
have responsibility
to make Add an article
a responsibility
the responsibility
regulation
about Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
environment
and take preventive ways to Add an article
the environment
avoid
Verb problem
prevent
people
from damaging the environment
such
as prohibited
deforestry, Wrong verb form
prohibiting
avoid
Wrong verb form
avoiding
wildfire
and Fix the agreement mistake
wildfires
save
biodiversity. Wrong verb form
saving
Moreover
, the government
also
responsible Add a missing verb
is also
to overcome
the Change preposition
for overcoming
damages
Fix the agreement mistake
damage
in
the Change preposition
to
environment
and educate
Wrong verb form
educating
people
to perserve
Correct your spelling
preserve
the
nature.
Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, many international companies
build their factories in a foreign country and contribute to the pollutions
and Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
environment
Replace the word
environmental
damages
in other countries. It is Fix the agreement mistake
damage
undoudtedly
that some international Correct your spelling
undoubtedly
companies
damage the
nature to open their lands and mines. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, in Papua, Indonesia, there are many mining companies
that open their mines by deforestry and abondon
it once they Correct your spelling
abandon
abandoned
finished
. These irresponsible ways Wrong verb form
finish
are
cause Unnecessary verb
apply
many
harm Correct quantifier usage
much
for
Change preposition
to
the
nature and it is a necessity for the company to take Correct article usage
apply
a
part in handling Correct article usage
apply
environment
issues.
Replace the word
environmental
To conclude
, both the government
and international companies
that open their factories in these countries should be responsible for environment
. Add an article
the environment
This
is due to
the fact that the
international Correct article usage
apply
companies
often cause damages
Fix the agreement mistake
damage
in
Change preposition
to
foreign
Add an article
a foreign
country
and Fix the agreement mistake
countries
abondon
the lands.Correct your spelling
abandon
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