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Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil and natural gas, are the main source for many countries. However, some nations are using alternatie energy such as solar power and wind power. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, fossil fuels are
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 major source for a number of nations.
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, some countries are moving to renewable types of
energy
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such
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 as solar
power
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 and wind
power
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. I believe that it is a beneficial development for the society and environment.
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 with, resources
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 as coal, oil and natural gas, are extremely harmful
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nature,
due to
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 the significant amount of
air
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 emissions, that occur during the burning process of fossil fuels in order to produce
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energy
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. To illustrate, one of the main problems in the world, global
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, is mostly affected by
air
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 pollution.
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,
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this
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 sources are limited in
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nature,
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 is why people cannot use them
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forever
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 as the main item to create
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heat and
energy
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.
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,
new
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 method of making
electicity
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electricity
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, alternative
energy
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, compared to
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fossil fuels, is significantly better in terms of the environment and humanity.
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 is mostly because renewable
energy
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 requires only unlimited and
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly types of
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power
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sunlight or
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wind,
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 means no dangerous gases or waste, only
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energy
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,
according to
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 a recent study, the level of
air
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 emission in the world was reduced, after some nations moved to alternative sources of electricity.
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 why,
trend
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with
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exploitating
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exploiting
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method
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methods
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 of creating
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energy
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 is
advantageous
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 improvement.
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, many countries still make
energy
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 by the traditional method,
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that
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 is
harmfull
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harmful
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the
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nature because of
air
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 emissions.
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, cutting-edge technologies
of
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 producing
energy
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,
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 as solar and wind
power
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 are popular in some nations as it does not have any negative impact on the earth,
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that
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 is why
it
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is
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 considered
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a positive development.

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