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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinio

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 of countries, some
people
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train
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trains
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 between cities because
their
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 are many
railway
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railways
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 and
train
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trains
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 that can still
available
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 to transport
form
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from
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 the
city
 to
other
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another city
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city
.
People
 believe the money still can be spent on improving
exsiting
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existing
 public transport. I disagree
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this
 case should be the task of their own
goverment
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government
 because we as a citizen in the
country
 or
city
just
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 enough
too
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 enjoy the
faclity
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facility
 that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
governments
make
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to
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 us. But, we as a citizen
also
 have the authority to speak out our
felling
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feelings
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 and desire
for
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to
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 develop our
country
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in
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on
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 the internet many countries are competing to build and design new public
transportation
 but they don’t think
to
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 improving
exsiting
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existing
 public
transportation
. Because,
another
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other
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 public
transportation
are
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 important to for advance, develop and renew
exsiting
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existing
exciting
 public facilities to make some develop
country
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the country
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. On
otherhand
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the other hand
, the
country
 should too think
what
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 kind of public
transportation
that
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apply
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many
people
 in their
county
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country
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needed
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. If the
country
need
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needs
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the
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a
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 fast train
too
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to
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 make
easier
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it easier
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people
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for people
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 goes to
other
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another city
other cities
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city
 so make it, Because the most important task of
president
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the president
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 and their cabinet is
think
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to think
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how
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 to make their
country
is
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comfortable
too
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to
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 live inside and
public
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in public
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 comfort.
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coherence cohesion
Your response is clear but has room for improvement in organization. Make sure to have a clear introduction and conclusion, and ensure each paragraph has a single main point supported by relevant details and examples.
task achievement
Work on grammatical accuracy and use of vocabulary. This will help convey your ideas more clearly and make your writing easier to understand.
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Consider including specific examples or data to support your points. This helps make your argument more convincing.
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Your essay demonstrates a willingness to consider both sides of the argument, which is crucial for a balanced discussion.
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Your essay touches on relevant issues such as the role of government and public transport needs, which shows a good understanding of the topic.

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