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Many people believe that teaching handwriting skills is unnecessary for children in this technology era. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With technological
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, people rarely
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 paper to write, Nowadays many people believe that teaching handwriting skills is superfluous, and I slightly agree with
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 essay, I will discuss both sides' points of view. Many parents still teach handwriting skills to their children though we now live in a Technical community because they think it's the better way but they do that because they are attached to customs they think that what they learned and was important to their generation is
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 important to the next generation
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 a as When a father uses a landline
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 and wants to make his son
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 a landline
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, Despite the
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 of the
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 was the
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, many people accept the
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 and do not attach their generations to their old customs, they understand the
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 of the world and care about how their children adapt to the new society, Nowadays no one uses handwriting in any field or place,
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, All companies do not
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 a paper report that with handwriting anymore. They all require that the report be sent by email
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, no one uses handwritten messages anymore. They all
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phone
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 communication methods that require the
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 skill of typing with a keyboard. Ultimately, In
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 essay, I discussed all points of view from my perspective, it's important to make the children learn both sides.
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coherence cohesion
The essay would benefit from a clearer organization. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the main ideas are well-supported with specific examples.
task achievement
The discussion of the differing perspectives on teaching handwriting skills is a good start, but it needs more detailed examples and explanations. Expanding on the points with more specific evidence will strengthen your task response.
coherence cohesion
Improve sentence structure and grammar to make your points clearer. Shorter, clearer sentences often have a greater impact than long, complex ones.
coherence cohesion
The essay introduces the topic and provides a conclusion that attempts to wrap up the discussion, which is good for overall structure.
task achievement
The author has made an effort to present both sides of the argument, which is important in addressing the task question.

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