The graph below shows the population of a particular country by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.

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The line graph illustrates data about the total number of people in a country by their ages from 1960

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up to

2040. In overview, there are three different stages of humans which are divided from the age of zero until

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65 years old.

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with, infants were dying all over the whole period,

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is clearly shown by the

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of the line when it dropped from 30% and it will

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its lowest point of ten per cent in 2040.

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, there is

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a gradual increase experienced

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old aged population which is from 65 upwards,

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, in 1960, they were around 15% and the number grew up to 30% after a period of five decades and in 2040 it will be on its peak point which will be approximately percentage of 45.

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, those who are 65+,

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overtook toddlers in 1990.

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, from the age of 15 until 64 years, there

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a lot of fluctuations during that time,

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, in 1960 there were around 55% but in 2040 they will

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decrease to almost 45%.

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, these same people

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the only ones who reached the maximum number sixty per cent

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three groups.

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