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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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Demonstrated in the given line graph is the
number
 of
visitors
 who
traveled
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 to an
island
 in the Caribbean between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
, it can be observed that the total
number
 of
visitors
 to the Caribbean
island
 saw an increase throughout the
period
.
Additionally
, the majority of
tourists
 stayed on the
island
 rather than on cruise
ships
 most of the time,
however
, it was surpassed by those who stayed on the
ships
at the end
 of the
period
. Beginning with the first half of the
period
, where there were 1
million
visitors
 in total who
traveled
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travelled
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 to the Caribbean
island
 in 2010, including about 0.75
million
tourists
 who stayed on the
island
,
while
 just about 0.25
million
ones
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preferred the cruise
ships
. In the following year, the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on the
island
 remained constant,
however
, those staying on cruise
ships
 saw an increase to 0.5
million
. Regarding the
number
 of
tourists
 who chose to stay on the
island
, it rose to approximately 1.8
million
 and 1.5
million
 in 2012 and 2013, respectively before
leveling
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 off
until
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in
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 2015. Meanwhile, those who preferred staying on cruises saw a steady increase to 1
million
 in 2014 after experiencing a drop to roughly 0.25
million
 in 2012. Shifting
focus
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 to the remaining half of the
period
, after remaining constant, the
number
 of
visitors
 witnessed a decline to around 0.75
million
 in 2016
then
 recovered to 1.5
million
 in the
last
 year.
By contrast
, there was a steady rise in the
number
 of
tourists
, making it end at a peak of 2
million
 in 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, period, tourists, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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