this diagram shows the brick manufactureing process

the

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diagram

depict

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depicts

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brick producing

process

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overall

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process

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the process

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consist

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of seven

stotages

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stages

storages

, which begin with digging in clay and finish with

delivery

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the delivery

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stage.

initially

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,some

specefic

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specific

vehicle dig clay on the ground, afterwards,

materails

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materials

puring on the roller from

metal

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grid next

which

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materials grid

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goes

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through mould

either

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wire cultter to alter

bricks

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with

help

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sand

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of sand

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plus

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and

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water.

Following

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this

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bricks

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dry in

oven

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for 24 to 48 hours.Next

bricks

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undergo some special

process

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for heating

this

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process

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start

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with moderate

temprature

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temperature

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then

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it's

rise

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afterwards

bricks

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cooling

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for 48 to 72 hours.

then

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bricks

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ready

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are ready

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for packaging and ultimately

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bricks

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brick

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packs go to vehicles for delivery.

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May 26, 2024

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Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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106 words

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this diagram shows the brick manufactureing process

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many healthy problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

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