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In many countries, more and more prople choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy important food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food.

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In many nations, there is an increasing number of
people
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 who prefer to
plough
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spend
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 money on foreign
food
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 rather than indigenous one. The writer contends that it is because of a prejudice passed down on generations that international cuisine
do
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 wonders for residents and
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 opinion can be tackled by governments by implementing various policies. It must be acknowledged that developing countries which
are not specialize
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are not specialized
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 in agriculture tend to
pressume
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presume
 that
food
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 imported from other countries is superior to local cuisine in terms of quality and
appetites
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.
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, local dwellers believe in
perceived
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the perceived
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 quality and safety standards of imported products,
therefore
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 having
a
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 willingness to purchase them at
high
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a high
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 cost.
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 false perception is passed down to our descendants which results in
people
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are
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being
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 reluctant to seek
to
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apply
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native
food
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.
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, there are several techniques to promote one to buy provincial
food
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.
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, governments should launch a variety of
compaigns
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campaigns
 in order to draw
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people
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 attention towards the detrimental side of international cuisine. It is evident that foreign
food
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 is high in
perservatives
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preservatives
 and addictives
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 the prolonged travel distance.
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, excessive consumption of somewhat
food
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 might
results
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 in weight gain and addiction-like behaviours. In the worst scenario, health and metabolism problems. Having
eqquiped
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acquired
 these
knowleadge
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knowledge
, customers will be more conscious
in
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of
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 opting for healthy
food
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 resources and, thereby, choose local
produces
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products
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 as they are fresh and not perishable. Taking all points into conclusion,
people
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 are more likely to choose imported
food
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due to
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 the fact that it is a prejudice from our ancestors.
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, an appropriate plan should be held so as to drive residents to local products.

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relevant specific examples
Your essay would benefit from more specific examples to illustrate your points. For instance, mentioning specific types of imported and local foods could provide more clarity and depth to your arguments.
clear comprehensive ideas
There are minor grammatical and lexical errors such as "pressume" instead of "presume", "addictives" instead of "additives", and "knowleadge" instead of "knowledge". While they do not significantly impede understanding, they should be corrected for a higher score.
logical structure
Ensure that each paragraph is cohesive. For instance, your reasons for why people buy imported food and the solutions to promote local food could be better linked together to improve the overall coherence.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion are clearly presented and summarize your main points effectively, which helps in achieving a higher score in that criterion.
complete response
You have addressed the task quite well and have provided relevant points about why people buy imported food and how local food could be promoted.
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