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The line graph gives data about the number of users of five different communication services worldwide from 1998 to 2008. Units: per 100 inhabitants

The line graph gives data about the number of users of five different communication services worldwide from 1998 to 2008. Units: per 100 inhabitants
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The line graph illustrates
Landline
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service
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, Internet
service
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, Mobile
broadband
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, Cellular phone
service
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, and Fixed
broadband
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 in terms of how many people used these
services
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 over a 10-year period from 1998 to 2008. It is noticeable that all the communication
services
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 registered dramatic upward trends. Fixed
broadband
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 and mobile
broadband
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 grew almost equally and maintained the lowest point in the surveyed period. In the year 1998, the percentage of
Landline
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 users was
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, accounting for over 15%, which was precisely 10% higher than that of Fixed, and Mobile
broadband
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services
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. After that,
Landline
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service
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 increased slightly and reached its peak of exactly 20% in 2006, but
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 it declined mildly to around 18% in 2006.
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, Fixed and mobile
broadband
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services
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 jumped equally to nearly 5% in 2008. From 1998 onwards, approximately 5% of people using communication
services
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 came from both Cellular phones and the Internet in 1998. 10 years later, the former went up rapidly to roughly 65%, surpassing
Landline
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 to become the most widespread of communication
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,
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 the latter saw a significant rise to close to 10% in 2004, after which it grew quickly to about 20% in 2006 before remaining steady over
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 number during the
last
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 2 years.

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