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Topic: The graph shows the average carbon emissions per person in four countries between 1967 and 2007.

Topic: The graph shows the average carbon emissions per person in four countries between 1967 and 2007.
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The supplied line graph illustrates how much carbon dioxide was produced by each person from 4 countries between 1967 and 2007.
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, the graph appropriates 4 countries with both Sweden and the United Kingdom with a downtrend
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 two lines
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Portugal and Italy with an uptrend. As can be seen, a remarkable change occurred in Sweden from 8.4% in 1967 to approximately 4.5% in 2017;
however
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, it reached 10.2% in 1997.
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, the average carbon dioxide in the United Kingdom was near 10.5% in the first year which
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declined to 8.4% in the end. It is clearly shown that Portugal's line started at 1.5% and reached 4.5% in 1997,
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 it steadily passed until the
last
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 year.
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, the Production of CO2 in Italy experienced the same pattern.
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, it was 4.1% in 1997 and increased to nearly 8% in 1997,
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 it steadily passed until 2007.
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