The charts give information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US Summerise the information about honey-bee colonies and honey production by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts give information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US

Summerise the information about honey-bee colonies and honey production by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The first bar diagram illustrates the number of honey-bee
colonies
and the second bar chart presents the amount of
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production of honey in the USA between 1970 and 2010 with 10-
year
intervals.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the first
year
is the most productive
year
of
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the
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honey-bee manufacturing and the trend seems to decrease throughout the period.
However
, in the second
year
of the record, the volume of bee
colonies
and honey production reversed.
To begin
with, the total of the US
colonies
of one type of bees occupied 4
million
and slightly increased by 0.1
million
before dramatically dropping to 3.5
million
in 1990. A significant decrease was seen in 2000 to well over 2.5
million
and it overwhelmingly non-stop nosedived to approximately 1.8
million
in the
year
2010.
Additionally
, the total honey production in America was at 130,000
tonnes
in 1970 and it noticeably went down by 20,000
tonnes
, reversed to the
quantity
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of
colonies
that shot up.
Furthermore
, it surged to 120,000 in 1990 and remarkably plummeted to 100,000
tonnes
in the next ten years.
Lastly
, a slump was seen
at the end
of the period and arrived at a nominal 70,000
tonnes
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words colonies, year, million, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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