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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The graph illustrates the figure for
visitors
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 travelling to a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
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, the number of tourists who used three kinds of accommodation including cruise ships, islands and total increased over the period shown. Remarkably, the number of people staying on cruise ships was the highest. Starting, in 2010, the figure for travellers using cruise ship residences on the Caribbean islands was 1
million
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visitors
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,
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, a gradual growth to about 2,7
million
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visitors
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 in 2016 and leaked at 5,5
million
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visitors
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at the end
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 of the period. Caribbean Island welcomed about 0,75
million
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visitors
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 stayed on the island and remained until 2011.
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 figure saw a significant rise to 1,5
million
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visitors
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 in 2015, after that, it dropped to about 1,25
million
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visitors
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 before backing up to 1,5
million
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visitors
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 in 2017. The
totals
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 climbed from about 2,5
million
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visitors
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 in 2010 to 0,5
million
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visitors
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 in 2011,
finally
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 reaching 2
million
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visitors
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 In 2017 after declining
0,25
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by 0,25
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million
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visitors
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 in 2012.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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