The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph illustrates data about international
sales
of the popular five mobile phone brands
from 2009 to 2013 in the world market by number
. Overall
, it can be easily seen that Samsung and Nokia brands
Fix the agreement mistake
brand
sales
were top of the list in the given time.
In the beginning
Nokia's Add a comma
beginning,
sales
were almost twice time more
Replace the word
much
than
Samsuns's Change preposition
as
sales
almost 450 and 220 respectively, but it
changed Correct pronoun usage
this
at the end
. It means that Samsung brands
mobile phone Change noun form
brand's
brands'
sales
significantly increased to 450 number
but Nokias' decreased to 250 number
.It is observed that apple's
Capitalize word
Apple's
sales
remarkablely
Correct your spelling
remarkably
remarkable
rise
to almost 100 Wrong verb form
rose
number
in 2011 and it was followed by a noticiable
growth to 150 in 2013. Unlike Correct your spelling
noticeable
the
apple's Correct article usage
apply
sales
, preferness
of LG Correct your spelling
the preference
brands
drop
to 80 Wrong verb form
dropped
number
in 2012. However
, The ZTE brands
went up slightly and regullarly
between 2009 and 2013 Correct your spelling
regularly
although
it was the lowest number
from 2011 to 2013.Submitted by emiretatli7 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, brands, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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