The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar graph illustrates data about international
sales
of the popular five mobile phone
brands
from 2009 to 2013 in the world market by
number
.
Overall
, it can be easily seen that Samsung and Nokia
brands
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brand
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sales
were top of the list in the given time. In the
beginning
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beginning,
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Nokia's
sales
were almost twice time
more
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much
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than
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as
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Samsuns's
sales
almost 450 and 220 respectively, but
it
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this
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changed
at the end
. It means that Samsung
brands
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brand's
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mobile phone
sales
significantly increased to 450
number
but Nokias' decreased to 250
number
.It is observed that
apple's
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Apple's
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sales
remarkablely
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remarkably
remarkable
rise
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rose
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to almost 100
number
in 2011 and it was followed by a
noticiable
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noticeable
growth to 150 in 2013. Unlike
the
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apply
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apple's
sales
,
preferness
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the preference
of LG
brands
drop
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dropped
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to 80
number
in 2012.
However
, The ZTE
brands
went up slightly and
regullarly
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regularly
between 2009 and 2013
although
it was the lowest
number
from 2011 to 2013.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, brands, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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