As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, newspapers are considered something old styled, as a
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consequence
consequences
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consequences,
internet
rosed up on them. In this
essay, I will explain this
transition with a focus on new
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the new
born
era of Verb problem
apply
internet
Capitalize word
Internet
news
.
In these
days, the Change preposition
These
newspaper
is consider
something old fashion. Wrong verb form
considered
In addition
, people today have a different attenction
as regard Correct your spelling
attention
safeguard
of planet's environment. It means, Wrong verb form
safeguarding
today
many individuals prefer to reduce the amount of wasted paper in order to do something good for their planet. Correct word choice
that today
For
this
reason
the Add a comma
reason,
newspaper
has lost its impact on people's everyday life. Obviously, someone else had suffer
economically from Change the verb form
suffered
this
, such
as production companies. But to face this
situation many newspaper
producers has
been inverted their type of communication from paper to digital Correct subject-verb agreement
have
news
on internet
.
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the internet
As a result
, internet
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the internet
becomes
the Wrong verb form
has become
nevralgic
point where Correct your spelling
neuralgic
news
are
constantly shared. Change the verb form
is
This
phenomenon exploded all around the world, every countries
today Change to a singular noun
country
are
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is
publicing
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publicising
publishing
informations
through platforms Change the wording
information
pieces of information
as
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such as
google
or most importantly on social media pages. Capitalize word
Google
This
communication have
had an immediate impact on people around the world for different reasons. Change the verb form
has
Firstly
, the main one, it
is because online communication is faster and smarter. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Secondly
, because
to write Correct word choice
apply
a
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news
a piece of news
news
on Correct article usage
the internet
internet
nobody Capitalize word
Internet
have
to cut a tree.
In conclusion, mankind is changing in a better way day by day. The Correct subject-verb agreement
has
newspaper
had concluded its journey and it leaves
free space for Wrong verb form
left
new
generation of Add an article
a new
the new
news
. As far as I am concerned, I prefer this
cutting-edge way to share informations
worldwide, because Change the wording
information
pieces of information
its
rapidity and because Change preposition
of its
is not ruin
our globe.Change the verb form
is not ruined
is not ruining
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