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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#internet #newspapers
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Nowadays, newspapers are considered something old styled, as a
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consequences
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internet
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 rosed up on them. In
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 transition with a focus on
new
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the new
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born
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era of
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internet
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news
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.
In these
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 days, the
newspaper
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 is
consider
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 something old fashion.
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, people today have a different
attenction
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attention
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 of planet's environment. It means,
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that today
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 many individuals prefer to reduce the amount of wasted paper in order to do something good for their planet.
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reason
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 the
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 has lost its impact on people's everyday life. Obviously, someone else had
suffer
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 economically from
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,
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 as production companies. But to face
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 situation many
newspaper
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 producers
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 been inverted their type of communication from paper to digital
news
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 on
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internet
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the internet
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.
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,
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internet
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the internet
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becomes
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has become
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 the
nevralgic
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neuralgic
 point where
news
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are
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 constantly shared.
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 phenomenon exploded all around the world, every
countries
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 today
are
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publicing
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publicising
publishing
informations
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information
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 through platforms
as
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google
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Google
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 or most importantly on social media pages.
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 communication
have
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 had an immediate impact on people around the world for different reasons.
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, the main one,
it
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apply
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is because online communication is faster and smarter.
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,
because
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to write
a
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news
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news
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 on
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the internet
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internet
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 nobody
have
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 to cut a tree. In conclusion, mankind is changing in a better way day by day. The
newspaper
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 had concluded its journey and it
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 free space for
new
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a new
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 generation of
news
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. As far as I am concerned, I prefer
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 cutting-edge way to share
informations
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information
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 worldwide, because
its
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of its
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 rapidity and because
is not ruin
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is not ruined
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 our globe.
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grammar
Work on grammatical accuracy to avoid basic errors such as subject-verb agreement.
lexis
Use more varied vocabulary to articulate your ideas more effectively.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments and make your essay more convincing.
structure
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion which frames the argument well.
structure
The transition between points is generally smooth, maintaining good flow.
task achievement
You have addressed the task and explained the transition from newspapers to internet news quite clearly.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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