The table below shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school

types between 2000 and 2009.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates the percentage of learners taking part in four sort of secondary school within 9 years.
It is clear that
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throughout the same time frame, community
schools
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emerged as the main providers of secondary education,
while
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specialist, grammar, and voluntary-controlled
schools
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saw a decrease in student enrollment First off, from 2000 to 2009, the percentage of voluntary-controlled
schools
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decreased from slightly over half to barely 20%
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or
one fifth
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.
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, during the same time frame, the proportion of kids attending grammar school just under 25% decreased by half. The comparatively small percentage of students attending specialized
schools
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(12%)
also
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decreased, yet not considerably.
On the other hand
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, community
schools
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had an increase in significance
while
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the other three categories of
schools
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saw a decrease.
Although
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in 2000 just 12% of students received an education at these institutions, during the next nine years
this
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number rose substantially to over half of all students.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 5 times.
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