The table below shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table illustrates the percentage of learners taking part in four sort of secondary school within 9 years.
It is clear that
throughout the same time frame, community Linking Words
schools
emerged as the main providers of secondary education, Use synonyms
while
specialist, grammar, and voluntary-controlled Linking Words
schools
saw a decrease in student enrollment
First off, from 2000 to 2009, the percentage of voluntary-controlled Use synonyms
schools
decreased from slightly over half to barely 20%Use synonyms
,
or Remove the comma
apply
one fifth
. Add a hyphen
one-fifth
Likewise
, during the same time frame, the proportion of kids attending grammar school just under 25% decreased by half. The comparatively small percentage of students attending specialized Linking Words
schools
(12%) Use synonyms
also
decreased, yet not considerably.
Linking Words
On the other hand
, community Linking Words
schools
had an increase in significance Use synonyms
while
the other three categories of Linking Words
schools
saw a decrease. Use synonyms
Although
in 2000 just 12% of students received an education at these institutions, during the next nine years Linking Words
this
number rose substantially to over half of all students.Linking Words
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