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As part of education, students should spend a period of time studying and living in a different country to learn language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, it is thought by some people that spending time
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learning and working in
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different
nation
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nations
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 to study language and traditional
custom
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 is valuable for
student's
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 learning. The
writter
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 of the essay believed that
this
 trend is a great way for educating
students
 despite any drawbacks. On the one hand, there are various
effectively
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way
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 to be fluent in another language when
students
 making a living in different nations,
such
 as
:
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communicating with local residents or learning all subjects by divergent terminology.
This
 allows people to have a chance to practice languages
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, and
also
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 them to be confident to speak without any deliberate thinking.
For instance
, a large number of Asians decide to go to
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Europe countries to
be
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master
in
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English.
On the other hand
, having a life in
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 nation will make
students
's
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 wider about different aspects of the world in
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 few years.
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, the customs of a country can obviously seen when people
living
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 there.
While
 the learners can
go
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surf the Internet for
the
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information
of
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this
but
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some of
that is
 not accurate. So that it is necessary for the trainees to be a dweller of
another cities
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. Take an example, the abundance of
oversea
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students
 tend to have a complex understanding
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 different cultures of a nation than others.
To conclude
,
this
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 of
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agree
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 that
students
 nowadays should live and study
oversea
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overseas
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 to gain more knowledge about the
custom
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 and the language of a different area
due to
be
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 fluent in dissimilar
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 and
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an
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deeply
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 understanding of cultures
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