There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: • describe what the problem with the changing rooms is • say what happened the last times you complained • explain what you want the manager to do.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in order to complain about the changing rooms in Sadaf Center. I am Mah Ka working out in
this
gym on a regular basis. Since I
have
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started to work out in
this
complex, the door of the changing room
had
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been broken.
Therefore
, most customers suffer from
this
problem on a regular basis.
Although
I complained several times about
this
problem to
staff
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, I could not receive a suitable answer. The
last
time I complained about
this
problem to your staff, the supervisor came and wrote the details about the door.
Then
,
this
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she promised to repair
this
on
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a timely manner, but
unfortunately
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it has not been repaired yet. To rectify
this
situation, I demand that you repair
this
door.
In addition
, in my idea, monitoring staff activities is essential to your complex. I suggest setting up a box for
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at the public hall. I hope
this
matter will be dealt with you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Mah Ka
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task achievement
Consider providing more specific details about the issues with the changing rooms. For instance, mention how the broken door impacts users and their experience at the sports center.
coherence cohesion
Be mindful of minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'the door of the changing room had been broken' could be revised to 'the changing room door has been broken.'
coherence cohesion
You have structured your letter well, using separate paragraphs for each point you wanted to cover, which makes it clear and easy to follow.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is appropriate for addressing a manager; it is respectful and constructive.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • frequent user
  • specific issues
  • cleanliness
  • hygiene
  • broken facilities
  • lack of supplies
  • address the issue
  • response
  • emphasize
  • well-maintained
  • comfort
  • hygiene
  • politely
  • firmly
  • request
  • resolve
  • prompt resolution
  • discuss
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