There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: • describe what the problem with the changing rooms is • say what happened the last times you complained • explain what you want the manager to do.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing in order to complain about the changing rooms in Sadaf Center. I am Mah Ka working out in
this
gym on a regular basis. Since I have
started to work out in Unnecessary verb
apply
this
complex, the door of the changing room had
been broken. Wrong verb form
has
Therefore
, most customers suffer from this
problem on a regular basis. Although
I complained several times about this
problem to staff
, I could not receive a suitable answer.
The Correct article usage
the staff
last
time I complained about this
problem to your staff, the supervisor came and wrote the details about the door. Then
, this
she promised to repair Correct determiner usage
apply
this
on
a timely manner, but Change preposition
in
unfortunately
it has not been repaired yet.
To rectify Add a comma
unfortunately,
this
situation, I demand that you repair this
door. In addition
, in my idea, monitoring staff activities is essential to your complex. I suggest setting up a box for recommendation
at the public hall.
I hope Fix the agreement mistake
recommendations
this
matter will be dealt with you as soon as possible.
Yours faithfully,
Mah KaSubmitted by kargar.mh1992 on
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task achievement
Consider providing more specific details about the issues with the changing rooms. For instance, mention how the broken door impacts users and their experience at the sports center.
coherence cohesion
Be mindful of minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'the door of the changing room had been broken' could be revised to 'the changing room door has been broken.'
coherence cohesion
You have structured your letter well, using separate paragraphs for each point you wanted to cover, which makes it clear and easy to follow.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is appropriate for addressing a manager; it is respectful and constructive.