There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: • describe what the problem with the changing rooms is • say what happened the last times you complained • explain what you want the manager to do.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in order to complain about the changing rooms in Sadaf Center. I am Mah Ka working out in
this
gym on a regular basis. Since I started to work out in
this
complex, the door of the changing room
have
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been broken.
Therefore
, most customers suffer from
this
problem on a regular basis.
Although
I complained several times about
this
problem to the staff, I could not receive a suitable answer. The
last
time I complained about
this
problem to your staff, the supervisor came and wrote the details about the door.
Then
, she promised to repair
this
in a timely manner, but unfortunately, it has not been repaired yet. To rectify
this
situation, I demand that you repair
this
door.
In addition
, in my idea, monitoring staff activities is essential to your complex. I suggest setting up a box for recommendations at the public hall. I hope
this
matter will be dealt with you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Mah Ka
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task achievement
While the response to the task prompt is comprehensive, adding a bit more detail on the impact of the problem on customers could bolster your task achievement score.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear and polite closing which aligns well with the formal tone required.
task achievement
Your writing tone is formal and appropriate for a letter to a manager, which strengthens the overall impression.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • frequent user
  • specific issues
  • cleanliness
  • hygiene
  • broken facilities
  • lack of supplies
  • address the issue
  • response
  • emphasize
  • well-maintained
  • comfort
  • hygiene
  • politely
  • firmly
  • request
  • resolve
  • prompt resolution
  • discuss
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