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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summaraise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity. Summaraise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram below illustrates the procedure of electricity by applying geothermal energy.
Overall
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, the process requires five steps before transferring electricity to the power plant, which are mainly divided into two sectors: underground working and upward ones. And the energy is generated by cold
water
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 combining stages of transformations.
To begin
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 with, to arrive at the Geothermal zone( area with hot rocks), cold
water
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 in the box needs to be pumped down underneath the ground all over through a 4.5km injection well. Afterwards, cold
water
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 will flow across hot rocks,
thus
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, being heated. In the final stage underground, as the principle of
high temperature
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high-temperature
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 liquid goes upward, the heated
water
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 is able to be pumped, allowing the heated
water
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 to be pumped upward to the condenser through the production well. Regarding the second sector of the process, hot
water
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 is pumped up and transferred into steam. By step four, steam will cross a channel to meet the turbine, which rotates depending on the power of the steam.
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 of the fifth step, the production from the forehead goes through a generator in order to produce electricity.
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, the energy will be sent to the power plant after five stages of execution.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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