The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashodwon museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashodwon museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.
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some information about visitors who visited the Ashdown museum one year after and before(In order
YA
and YB) some changes in
this
place and their satisfaction about
this
matter. The number of
people
who were so satisfied
YB
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this
event was 15%
however
,
this
number increased to more than twice in the
YA
. The persons
were
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who were
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satisfied changed by 10 more
percent
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during the
YA
. Dissatisfied
people
people
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in YB were almost
a
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half of all amount
also
,
this
amount fell
dramaticly
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dramatically
to
one quarter
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wich
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which
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is the biggest
chang
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in
YA
. The number of very dissatisfied inYB was 10%
evendogh
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even dog
this
percent
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became less by 5% in
YA
. Some
people
in both of
this
year
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no
respnse
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by 5% had no change.
Also
during the year before refurbishment were 74,000
people
and the
people
who visited and
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to
answering
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this
test were about 92,000
people
.
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all
people
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after
this
changes
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ver more happier than before and
this
matter
help
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helps
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this
museum to be more
succsessfull
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successful
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words ya, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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