The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashodwon museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevent.
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The diagrams
illustrates
some information about visitors who visited the Ashdown museum one year after and before(In order Change the verb form
illustrate
YA
and YB) some changes in this
place and their satisfaction about this
matter.
The number of people
who were so satisfied YB
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with YB
this
event was 15% however
, this
number increased to more than twice in the YA
. The persons were
satisfied changed by 10 more Correct pronoun usage
who were
percent
during the Change the spelling
per cent
YA
.
Dissatisfied people
people
in YB were almost Remove the redundancy
apply
a
half of all amount Correct article usage
apply
also
, this
amount fell dramaticly
to Correct your spelling
dramatically
one quarter
Add a hyphen
one-quarter
wich
is the biggest Correct your spelling
which
chang
in Correct your spelling
change
YA
. The number of very dissatisfied inYB was 10% evendogh
Correct your spelling
even dog
this
percent
became less by 5% in Change the spelling
per cent
YA
. Some people
in both of this
year was
no Correct subject-verb agreement
were
respnse
by 5% had no change.
Correct your spelling
response
Also
during the year before refurbishment were 74,000 people
and the people
who visited and attend
to Wrong verb form
attended
answering
Wrong verb form
answer
this
test were about 92,000 people
.
Allin
all Correct your spelling
All in
people
Correct article usage
the people
after
this
changes
ver more happier than before and Correct subject-verb agreement
change
this
matter help
Change the verb form
helps
this
museum to be more succsessfull
.Correct your spelling
successful
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