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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Some people believe that all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #mothers #fathers #course #parents
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Agree & Disagree Intro lots of individuals are of the opinion that every
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parents
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parent
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 must be obliged to pass a curriculum on how to prepare and act as
an
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apply
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appropriate ones that are qualified to bring up a child. As far as my view is concerned, I
totall
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totally
 concur with
this
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 statement, and in
following
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the following
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 I explain in
details
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detail
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. Body 1
Parrents
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Parents
 should know to support children
untill thay
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until they
 gain
fully
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full
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dependency
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independence
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 and make decisions through their lives by themselves. Attain
this
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 aim to be completely understood to how
treat
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 kids to burgeon their self-confidence,
govenments
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governments
 are responsible to check
parents
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'
knowlwdge
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knowledge
 of family and health before they get married even.
For instance
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, in
Iran
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Iran,
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 couples are forced to pay a visit to
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parents'
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their parents'
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counceler
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counsellor
 before
gain
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gaining
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certificate
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a certificate
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 to be married. Body 2 It is worth
to mention
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mentioning
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 that good
parents
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is
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are
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 what
healthy
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a healthy
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 public
is needed
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needs
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. Successful people who
are
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apply
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make their
life
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lives
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 full of meaning
came
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come
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 from decent families who
dedicated
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dedicate
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 bunches of their time and efforts to provide
suffice
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 attention. Conclusion In conclusion, growing up
kids
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with kids
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are
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is
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 not
easy
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as easy
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 as
a
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apply
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pie; being
knowledgable
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knowledgeable
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 in case of bringing children and
put
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putting
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 them in
right
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the right
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 direction
require
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requires
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 attempts and cautiousness of needs.
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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear opinion and attempts to support it with reasons and examples. However, there are several spelling and grammatical errors that affect readability. For Task Achievement, aim to provide more detailed examples and clearer explanations to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical structure of your essay. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your ideas flow smoothly from one to the next. Using transition words will help improve coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction and conclusion are clearly linked to your main arguments, and try to summarize your key points effectively in the conclusion.
task achievement
You have a clear stance on the topic, which is important for Task Achievement. Your introduction effectively sets up the topic and your position.
task achievement
You attempt to provide real-world examples, such as the practice in Iran, which helps to illustrate your points.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, indicating a clear structure.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mandatory
  • crucial skills
  • personal growth
  • parenting styles
  • autonomy
  • financial and logistical barriers
  • implement
  • undermine
  • experience
  • cultural differences
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