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The graph illustrates the impact of vaccinations on the incidence,
a
child illness in Britain from 1940 to 1990.
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Overall
, the number of children having whooping cough in Britain during the beginning period of vaccination decreased while
the figure for vaccine uptake fluctuated. Remarkably, the highest number of offspring with whooping cough in Britain when they were being vaccination
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figure for vaccine uptake was in 1990.
Starting, in 1940, the rate of cases of whooping cough in the time of vaccination beginning period stood at 50 thousands
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in 1990.
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Additionally
, the proportion of vaccine uptake cases in 1970 was over 81%. After that, this
figure experienced a bottom at 30% before peaking at 94% in 1990.Submitted by writingeilts on
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