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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided chart compares the
cost
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 of
bananas
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 in four nations between 1994 and 2004.
Overall
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, the
price
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 of
bananas
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 was the lowest in the USA during the recorded period and had the highest average
cost
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 in Japan.
According to
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 the graph, the
price
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 of
bananas
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 was exactly 1 dollar for each
kilogram
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 between 1994 and 1997,
then
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, it increased in 1998 to just below 1.5
dollars
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, and after that, its
price
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 levelled off for the rest of the years. The
cost
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 of
bananas
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 in Germany was more than its
cost
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 in the USA during the recorded years and exactly 1.5
dollars
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 per
kilogram
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 and
then
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 experienced some fluctuations and reached the highest
cost
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 in 2002 exactly 2
dollars
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 for each
kilogram
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,
finally
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 was just below 2
dollars
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 in 2004. The
price
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 of
bananas
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 was 2
dollars
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 in France in 1994 and it remained constant until 1998 after that it reached its lowest
price
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 exactly 1.5
dollars
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 for each
kilogram
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, after that it saw some oscillations and returned to its
price
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 in 1994. The
price
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 of
bananas
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 in Japan in 1994 was the same as in France and
then
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 it experienced an upward trend and saw the highest
cost
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 of exactly 3
dollars
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 in 1998 for the rest of the years
then
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 its
price
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 fluctuated between 1999 and 2003 and
finally
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 reached 2.5
dollars
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 for each
kilogram
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 in 2004.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, bananas, price, kilogram, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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