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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows information about global tourism which they came
in
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from
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 5 countries
that
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apply
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namely
USA
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the USA
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 ,
Brazil
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 , Egypt, Malaysia and
French
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France
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.
Overall
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, the graph
Illustrated
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Illustrates
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 international tourists
they arrive
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arriving
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 in millions
between
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apply
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over
a
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apply
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15 years from 1995 to 2010.
as
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As
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 can be seen
Brazil
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was
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had
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 the lowest
number
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in contrast
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USA
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the USA
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was
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had
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 the highest
number
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 in the graph. Now back to details , the
number
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 of
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Brazil
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Brazilian
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tourist's
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tourists
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 was no change from 1995 to 2000 after that the
rate's
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rate
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of
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in
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Brazil
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was
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apply
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rose gradually between 2000 to 2010 to hit
the
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a
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 peak in 2010
while
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 the
trend's
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trend
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of
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for
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 Egypt was the same exactly the
figure's
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figures
figure
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 of
Brazil
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 . On
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the onther
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onther
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other
another
 hand, the
number
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 of Malaysia
growth
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grew
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 dramatically to reach the top
number
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 in the year 2010 .
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Likewise
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 trend 's French was increased rapidly
during
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from
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 1995 till 2000
after
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and after
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 that
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it remaind
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remaind
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remained
remind
remains
 stood
the
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at the
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 same level until 2005 to rose
agin
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again
 to the highest point in 2010. The figure
of
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for
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USA
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the USA
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 started increasing to reach to highest point in 2015 after which the trend decreased slightly in 2010 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words brazil, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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