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The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart indicates how many people followed prominent influencers
in
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 Instagram in 2018 and 2021. It can be clearly seen that Cristiano Ronaldo had the highest
number
 of fans
in
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 social
media
 in 2021.
However
,in 2018 people did not prefer to follow The Rock
in
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 Instagram. In 2021,just under 300
million
 people followed Cristiano Ronaldo
in
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 social
media
(which was the highest
number
 of
population
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 interested in Ronaldo),making
this
 considerably more than in 2018(
100million
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100 million
).
Moreover
,the average of followers
for
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Ariana Grande was as popular as The Rock in both years(2018 and 2021),100
million
 and 250
million
,respectively.
In addition
,The Rock had the lowest
number
 of followers
in
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 social
media
 in 2018.
Similarly
,the popularity of Kylie Jenner was the same as Selena Gomez (250
million
)
in
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 Instagram in 2021.
Following
this
,the
number
 of
folk
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 who chose to follow Selena Gomez
in
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internet
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 was roughly 130
million
,just ahead of Kylie Jenner with 100 fans in
media
 in 2018.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, media, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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