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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter, describe the problems explain how it is affecting people say what the company should do to help Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to express my concern regarding the poor internet connection in my area. My name is Neha Singh, and I am living at 3435 Queenston Drive, Mississauga. For a few days, I have been facing some issues with my internet speed. Previously, I didn't pay much attention thinking it might be
due to
 bad weather, which will get resolved on its own. But, when I asked my neighbours who have the same connection, they complained the same. The upload and download speeds have dropped significantly to 10 Mbps. As you know, after COVID, people are mostly working from home, and
this
 makes it difficult to work. Many a time, I have been suddenly dropped off from my online meetings.
Additionally
, students are facing problems attending online classes which will hamper their final exams. From everyone in my area, I would request you to please come and investigate the issue and resolve it as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Neha
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task achievement
Make sure to include all requested information clearly. You did well in addressing the problems, their effects, and the suggested solution. However, providing a bit more detail on when the issues started or any attempts made to contact customer service could add to the clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and transitions smoothly between them. You have done well in organizing your letter, but slight improvements could make it even more coherent.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
The tone is suitable for a formal letter and the purpose of writing is clearly communicated.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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