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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summurise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summurise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates information about the average weekly spending by families in one country from 1968 to 2018.
Overall
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, we can clearly see that household
goods
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 were at the same point in both years
while
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 food was the largest increase, fuel and power and personal
goods
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 were the lowest in 2018. Getting back to details, food was at its highest point at 35% in 1968,
then
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 it increased sharply to about 18 per cent in 2018, housing was the opposite where people only spent 10% on it in 1968
then
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 it jumped to just under 20% meanwhile fuel and power were around six per cent in 1968
then
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 decreased a tiny fraction in 2018 clothing and footwear were one in ten in 1968
then
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 fell sharply to 5% in 2018.
Also
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, personal
goods
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 and transport were nearly 8% in 1968, After that personal
goods
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 declined quickly to about 4 per cent
while
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the
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transport rose to roughly 16%,
On the other hand
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, spending on leisure was just under a tenth in 1968
then
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 upsurged to 23%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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