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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views
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 the recent advancement of machine technology in different fields
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intelligence
 has
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 or negative influence in their coming lives. I believe that artificial
intelligence
 is developed by humans,
hence
 it could be controlled and operated where it's the most applicable as needed. On the one hand, many people believe that artificial
intelligence
 is the best technology for achieving impossible targets or goals in various fields including
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satellite based
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 data assimilation, underground movement of water etc
On the other hand
, it is argued that artificial
intelligence
 would not be superior as compared with human
intelligence
 and could not replace our brains.
Therefore
, the invention of AI is not widely
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 in our
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lives
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, from my
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, AI has been benefiting in many fields to facilitate
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people
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life
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 in order to reduce
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human efforts.
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 and agriculture machinery in very hot regions have played
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vitol
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vital
 role.
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task achievement
Your essay presents a solid discussion of both views on AI but is somewhat unbalanced in its treatment. Providing more detailed examples to support both perspectives would help strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
There are noticeable grammatical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing that can detract from the clarity of your points. Improving sentence structure and making your writing more grammatically accurate will enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is suitable for the IELTS format.
task achievement
You have addressed both views on the topic and provided your own opinion which is essential for a balanced discussion.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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