The graph shows how many minutes Britons spent making local, national, and international fixed line calls between 1995 and 2002.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
minutes
who used phone calls in three kinds such
as home town, fundamental line and overseas in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002.
the general overview here is that, over the period, there was a significant increase in the phone call group of Local-fixed line, However
, the proportion of mobiles was advancing a few in the phone group.
According to
the data, in 1995, the telephone group between regional and laboured, it was essential to the first note that the number of communities was elite at 90 minutes
, However
, from 1995 to 2002, the rate of international significance increased from 39 to 32 minutes
.
Furthermore
, from 1995 to 2002, the mobiles were increase
dramatically from 5 to 45 Change the verb form
were increased
were increasing
minutes
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