The chart below gives information on the number of workers in different occupations who migrated to Australia between 2009 and 2012.

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The bar chart illustrates in detail the number of employees in four different jobs who moved to Australia between 2009 and 2012.

Overall

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, Accountant was the highest over four years.

In contrast

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, computer programming was the lowest over four years.

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with, accountants stayed at 20 in 2009.

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it rocketed to 28

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workers

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in 2010. Next two years, it decreased quickly to 21

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workers

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, computer programmers went up to 4 in

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workers

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. Next year, it went back to 2 in

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workers

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. In 2012, it jumped to 5 in

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. Turning into detail, cook fell to 15 in

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workers

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in 2010. In 2011, It went to 18

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workers

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. Next year, It dropped to 16

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workers

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. Moving onto software engineering, It started at 19

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workers

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in 2009.

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it increased slightly to 21

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workers

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in 2011. In the next year, it dropped down to 17

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workers

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

157 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Migration patterns
Occupation categories
Significant growth
Labor shortages
Booming industries
Visa regulations
Job market saturation
Economic downturns
Skill shortages
Economic contribution
Infrastructure pressure
Technological advancements
Global economic predictions
Policy changes

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The chart below gives information on the number of workers in different occupations who migrated to Australia between 2009 and 2012.

Television is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family, we just watch television. To what extent fo you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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