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The map below show the centre of a small called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below show the centre of a small called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate a small
center
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centre
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 of the city named Islip, and plans for its development.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
center
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centre
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 of the Islip will develop from
small
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a small
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, commercial
center
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 to a larger commercial and tourist area. The most notable development will be
extended
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extending
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a
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the
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road
 to a dual carriageway which is a circular
road
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that goas
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goas
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goes
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 around the city
center
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centre
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,
also
 the main
road
 will be replaced by pedestrian's ways. There are many shops and the countryside in the north of the main
road
 will be demolished and replaced by a shopping
center
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centre
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, car park, bus station, and new housing,
however
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however,
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 the shops in the south of the main
road
 will remain. The park in the
soth
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south
 of the
center
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centre
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 will remain but it will be smaller than before, and new housing will be constructed next to the park.
Although
 the southern part of the Islip will not see big changes
and
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apply
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school
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schools
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 will remain in the same place as it is.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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