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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

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It is believed by
few
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a few
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 individuals that the present
time
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 is the most favourable phase
of
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the
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apply
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mankind to be alive. I strongly agree with
this
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 statement.
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However
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 sometimes I feel like living in the past and the reasons behind
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 will be discussed in detail.
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, our lives have become much easier and
comfortable
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more comfortable
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due to
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advancement
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advancements
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 in technology.
Firstly
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, commuting to different places is now much more convenient because of different modes of transportation.
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, in the past
people
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 had to travel by
horses
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horse
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 or
bullock-carts
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bullock carts
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, and it would take weeks to travel to
far apart
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 destinations.
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, these days we have aeroplanes and bullet trains, which help us reach our desired locations within hours.
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, mankind has been able to increase their lifespan by advancement in
medical
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the medical
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 field.
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, our forefathers had an average
life
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 of approximately 40 years, but now we are able to live till 100 years of age.
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,
sometime
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sometimes
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 I feel like going back to our ancestor’s
time
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 when
life
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 was much simpler and stress-free. Back in the
days
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day
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, humans were much more happy and joyful because they used to spend more
time
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 with their loved
one
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ones
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, compared to now.
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, these days
people
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 have a much more hectic
life
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 and connect with their close ones only on a smartphone.
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 why earlier times were much better when
people
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 were able to spend quality
time
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 with one another. In conclusion, it can be rightly said that our lives have become much more comfortable and convenient than in the past,
although
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,
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life
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the life
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 of our ancestors was much
peaceful
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more peaceful
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 and happier as
people
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 were able to spend quality
time
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 with one another.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that transitions between paragraphs are smooth to enhance the flow of the essay. For example, you could use phrases such as 'Another advantage' or 'In addition' at the beginning of the second paragraph.
task achievement
It would be beneficial to elaborate more on why earlier times were more stress-free, providing specific examples or evidence to support your point.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly sets the stage for the discussion and provides a good overview of what to expect in the essay.
relevant specific examples
The essay provides relevant examples, such as advancements in transportation and medical science, to support the main arguments made.
clear comprehensive ideas
Each paragraph is focused on a main idea, making the essay easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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