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The table below provides statistics on several major metro(MRT) system aroun dthe world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below provides statistics on several major metro(MRT) system aroun dthe world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table diagram illustrates the data of the MRT
system
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 in six different countries comprising the year completed, total
length
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 (in kilometres) and annual capacity (millions).
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,
it is clear that
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 the London railway
system
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 is the oldest and has the longest
length
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while
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 Los Angeles's MRT which was finished just in a couple of decades is still longer than
Japan
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's.
Moreover
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, The capacity per year of Tokyo is the highest whilst another city in
Japan
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,
Kyoto
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, remains in
last
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 place.
To begin
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 with, a London major metro
system
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 was constructed in 1863 with a massive 1,100km in
length
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 followed by Paris which was built in 1890 and had 594km.
Kyoto
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system
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 was done in 1980 with a meagre 11km long;
on the contrary
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, Los Angeles which was sprung up in 2001 had a total
length
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 more than
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Kyoto
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 by a petite 3. What is interesting to note is that the metro
system
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 in the capital city of the UK was longer than the old capital city of
Japan
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,
Kyoto
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, exactly 100 times.
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, a major metro operation in Tokyo registered 1,434 higher than Both London and Paris by approximately 600 and 700 respectively.
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, the
Kyoto
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 annual capacity stayed in the final place as the same as its total
length
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, with 11. What is surprising to see is that the
length
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 of two cities in
Japan
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 had a huge difference, well over 100 times.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words system, length, japan, kyoto with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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