The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.

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The pie charts illustrate the major reasons that

people

migrated

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the UK

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in 2007.

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it is clear that

the

mainly

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effect of supporting

this

decision was things

which

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apply

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related to

job

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the job

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. First and

above all

, having a

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specific

job had a proportion of immigration to the

, at 30%, and

this

was comparable to emigration, at 29%. A significant number of

people

, 22%,

also

emigrated since they were looking for work,

while

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people

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came

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the

for

this

reason

was dramatically less than a fifth.

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, formal study, which was another purpose for

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to the

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had a percentage of just over a quarter of

people

who immigrated

for

this

reason

Furthermore

, there was a small minority, at 4%,

people

emmigrating

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emigrating

for

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purpose.

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which

were accompany

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and

join

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they

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had similar proportions for immigration and emigration, at 15% and 13%, respectively.

Additionally

, the proportion of

people

emigrating for “no

reason

stated” was 3 times the proportion of

people

immigrating for the same

reason

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that, “other” accounted for quite

similar

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a similar

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that

people

came

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who came

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to and left the

, at 11% and 14%, respectively.

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