The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.
The bar chart illustrates the
teenagers
spent their time
on
doing certain activities by Change preposition
apply
hours
each week in Chester between 2002 and 2007.
Overall
, the most preferable activity in the given time
period
was watching television while
bowling was the least favorite. Furthermore
, watching television, going to pubs/discos and shopping showed an increase in the numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
hours
spent on these activities over the period
whereas
other activities showed a decrease in hours
, exept
watching DVDs, it Correct your spelling
except
was
showed a Unnecessary verb
apply
fluctuate
trend.
Change the verb form
fluctuating
To begin
with
watching television, Add a comma
with,
teenagers
spent exactly 25 hours
for
Change preposition
on
this
activity in 2002 which increased to almost 40 hours
in 2007. In given
Add an article
the given
time
period
, both going to pubs/discos and shopping dramatically increased more than double, from around 5 to just over 15 and from about 5 to exactly 15 respectively.
On the other hand
, teenagers
spent 10 hours
on
doing homework in 2002, Change preposition
apply
this
figure decreased just
over 5 Change preposition
to just
hours
in 2007. Doing sport dropped significantly from 10 hours
to about 3 hours
. Additionally
, bowling was under 5 hours
in entire
Add an article
the entire
an entire
time
period
and it fell slightly around
3 Change preposition
to around
hours
in the final year. Furthermore
, watching DVDs showed Correct article usage
a fluctuated
fluctuated
trend and the number of Wrong verb form
fluctuating
hours
that teenagers
spent on this
activity started with
around 10 Change preposition
at
hours
and similarly
finished with exactly 10 hours
, but it reached a peak of over 15 hours
in 2004 and 2005.Submitted by svdnruslu on
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