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The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparison where necessary.

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The diagram illustrates how
fish
 are smoked commercially.
Overall
, manufacturing of smoked
fish
 is a multistage process which starts with catching
fish
 by a net,
however
, it ends up with selling
fish
 in
shop
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. Meanwhile,
this
 procedure needs thirteen distinct steps for accomplishment. The process commences when
fish
 are caught in nets from a river or sea and
then
 transported to port by a small boat. From
this
 point, they are frozen and
then
 later undergo a thawing process in freshwater. The following stages are to cut open the
fish
 and put them into a container which has salt water with some amount of yellow colouring. In the upcoming stage, these
fish
 are
then
 smoked and ready to be packed in boxes. After covering
in
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the boxes, smoked
fish
 are frozen at a zero-degree centigrade temperature in a large container.
Finally
, they are kept in cold storage bins and distributed by truck to shops to the consumers for selling purposes.
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language
Ensure precision in language and avoid minor slip-ups to improve overall clarity.
structure
Include a brief introduction and conclusion to give the essay a rounded structure.
content
Provide specific details about the different stages to offer a more thorough explanation.
content
The essay effectively details the essential steps in the process, showing a clear understanding of the procedure.
structure
Logical flow of information is maintained, ensuring the reader can follow the process smoothly.

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