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Band 6.5

Write a letter to your favourite restaurant. Include the following: · Your reason for writing · What you like about the restaurant · Suggestions for improvement

#favourite #restaurant #reason #suggestions #improvement
Dear Sir, I am your regular customer because of your impeccable
services
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service
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. I am writing
this
 letter to express my best experience and satisfaction. I often visit your
restaurant
 during weekends with my family members and friends. The interior design of your
restaurant
 is eye-catching, and the decent background music creates a peaceful environment, and
enhance
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enhances
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 the test of food.
Moreover
, your service staff is very polite and professional in their services.
However
, there are
few
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a few
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 things which I would like you to improve.
Firstly
, as your
restaurant
 is famous, and most of the customers have to wait for their turn. I must say, you should build a waiting room for them.
Secondly
, your
restaurant
 needs to improve service time as we have to wait for a long time after giving our order I have implicit faith in you, and I believe you will improve your service
as well as
waiting
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the waiting
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 area. Yours faithfully, Raj
Submitted by rajwants.1997 on

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coherence cohesion
Try to separate different ideas into new paragraphs for better readability and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to slightly vary your vocabulary and sentence structures to make the letter more engaging.
task achievement
A bit more detail about what makes the restaurant exceptional would improve the letter.
task achievement
Consider softening the suggestions for improvement to maintain a consistently polite tone.
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The letter clearly states the purpose and provides specific things you like about the restaurant.
coherence cohesion
The closing is appropriate and polite.
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The overall tone is respectful and positive, suitable for such a letter.
coherence cohesion
You have maintained a logically structured flow, presenting your reasons, likes, and suggestions clearly.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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