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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Most countries import
its
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their
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 organic product needs from overseas countries with the help of
air
 logistics. Many people think that
,
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 it has bad impacts and the rest of the majority stays in
oppose
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for
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to
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 the statement.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and will explain why it has negative effects
for
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on
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 both humanity and nature. First and foremost,
air
 transit is the best way to deliver organic
products
.
Action
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 itself helps
for
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most individuals to have steady access
for
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to
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ingridients
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ingredients
 all around the world;
however
, most of the
products
 from different origins have high price tags in
supermerkets
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supermarkets
 that make
it
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them
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 not affordable at all. Fast delivery of
bio-
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bio-products
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products
 made by
aircrafts
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aircraft
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let
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lets
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 everyone
to
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apply
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benefit from the taste of freshness.
For example
, Vietnam is
the
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apply
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Europe's biggest supplier
for
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of
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 exotic fruit
variety
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varieties
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 and
country's
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the country's
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avarge
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average
 for monthly import rate
closer
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is closer
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 to 100.000
kilogram
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kilograms
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. In order to place
order
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orders
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 fast country
use
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uses
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 its 15 huge cargo plains to move containers all the way to Europe.
Conversely
, using
airplains
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aeroplanes
 for food exchange has more disadvantages than its advantages. Frequent use of
air
 logistics in
transition
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the transition
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 process
damage
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damages
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 climate
while
 reducing 30% carbon
emmision
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emission
emissions
 per transfer. Admittedly, preventing possible hunger in most states helps to maintain stability;
although
,
this
 phenomenon has the highest possibility of spreading unwanted bacteria with food that can cause major
problem
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problems
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 with the epidemic disasters and
the
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apply
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pandemic illnesses that
hardly
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are hardly
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 known by health organizations. Since
airways
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airways are
airways were
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 able to make quick
transition
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transitions
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 over the states these illnesses can be spread nonchalantly as
products
 are able to contain these gems for a certain amount of time.
For instance
, in 2012 most people in Central Africa got the ebola virus through vegetables and fruits that
brought
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were brought
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 from France. In conclusion, natural product transportation made with the help of
air
 logistics can be beneficial in case of prevention in
need based
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need-based
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 exchange. Despite all, these actions make structural threads for
air
 pollution and health matters. For
better
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a better
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future
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future,
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 we have to deny unwanted
increase
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increases
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of
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in
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 transmissions.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea that directly supports your argument. Linking sentences within paragraphs should be more coherent for smoother reading.
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Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the essay's sophistication. Avoid repetition of the same words or phrases.
task achievement
Provide clearer examples and explanations to support your points. This will make your argument more compelling and easy to follow.
task achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, as required by the task prompt.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear effort to present a structured essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Your opinion

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