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The two maps below show an island, before and after construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps presented below depict the conditions of an
island
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 before and after a proposed redevelopment for tourism purposes.
Overall
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, it is evident that the
island
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 underwent significant transformations. Prior to redevelopment, the
island
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 was devoid of any essential infrastructure. Following the reconstruction, it evolved into a more rural environment with a certain level of amenities required for tourism. To commence, the verdant regions containing some trees have been preserved,
meanwhile
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 a restaurant and reception
area
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 have been erected in the middle of the
island
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.
Additionally
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, on the western portion, the sandy shore has been conserved and a designated swimming
area
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 has been incorporated. Upon surveying the western and eastern sides of the restaurant and reception
area
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, several accommodations have been put in place for the convenience of tourists.
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, a footpath has been constructed throughout the village to enhance accessibility for visitors. Adjacent to the reception
area
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, to the south, two boats and a pier have been constructed for recreational purposes.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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