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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph demonstrates the variation in owning three different electrical appliances
as well as
 the
number
 of
hours
 spent on
housework
 per
week
 in a nation from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, the proportion of people
owing
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owning
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 home appliances increased significantly over the
period
,
while
 the
number
 of
hours
 spent on
housework
 per
week
 decreased steadily. Between 1920 and 1980,
the
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refrigerator ownership rose dramatically from 2% in 1920 to 100% in 1980. Vacuum cleaner ownership
also
 saw a steady increase during
this
period
, reaching about 30% by 1920 and nearly 90% by 1980. By the end of the
period
, all households owned these appliances.
In contrast
, the
number
 of
hours
 spent on
housework
 per
week
 decreased significantly over the same
period
. In 1920, households spent approximately 50
hours
 per
week
 on
housework
.
This
number
 fell sharply to 20
hours
 by 1960.
Although
 the
hours
 fluctuated slightly in the latter half of the century, they continued to decline, reaching around 10
hours
 per
week
 by 2019.
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