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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph demonstrates the variation in owning three different electrical appliances
as well as
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 the
number
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 of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 per
week
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 in a nation from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, the proportion of people
owing
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 home appliances increased significantly over the
period
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,
while
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 the
number
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 of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 per
week
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 decreased steadily. Between 1920 and 1980,
the
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refrigerator ownership rose dramatically from 2% in 1920 to 100% in 1980. Vacuum cleaner ownership
also
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 saw a steady increase during
this
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period
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, reaching about 30% by 1920 and nearly 90% by 1980. By the end of the
period
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, all households owned these appliances.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 per
week
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 decreased significantly over the same
period
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. In 1920, households spent approximately 50
hours
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 per
week
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 on
housework
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.
This
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number
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 fell sharply to 20
hours
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 by 1960.
Although
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 the
hours
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 fluctuated slightly in the latter half of the century, they continued to decline, reaching around 10
hours
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 per
week
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 by 2019.
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