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Chart the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in 2017.

#amount #tea #coffee #four #countries
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tonnes
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of tonnes
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 of
tea
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 and
coffe
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coffee
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 from abroad by four different nationalities namely, Canada, Britain,
USA
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the USA
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, and
German
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Germany
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 in 2017.
Overall
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, it is clearly observed that the total of
tea
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 imported
in
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into
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UK
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the UK
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 had the number one spot among others.
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,
UK
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 had the the lowest spot in
coffee
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 imported.
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Uk
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UK
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 and the
Usa
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USA
 had the
bigger
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of
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volume imported in
tea
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 than in
coffee
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 throughout 2017. As the data shows the
UK
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tea
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number’s
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 had eightfold the
number’s
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number of
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coffee
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 which was 20,000
tones
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.
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. The value of the USA
tea
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had
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 roughly twice times rather
than
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of
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coffee
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 which was 40,000
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tones
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tonnes
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.
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,
the
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apply
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Canada and
the
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apply
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Germany had
the
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deviation patterns during the same time frame.
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, the total of
coffee
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 imported
in
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into
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UK
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the UK
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 had 40000
tones
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 which
double
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 fold from
from
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the total in
tea
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. Meanwhile, there was a slight difference between
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in
german
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German
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 which were at around 41,000 and 40,000
tones
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.
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