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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for future years.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for future years.
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The line graph illustrates how the number of
people
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 who have moved from rural to urban areas in
Iran
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, Indonesia, and Russia has changed since 2000, with
the
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projections until 2025.
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, all countries have experienced a growth in the number of
people
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 who have moved to urban areas, and they are predicted to continue growing until 2025.
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, by the end of the period,
Iran
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 will be the leader in the proportion of its
population
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 that lives in urban areas. At the beginning of the period, at around 15
million
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people
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, Russia had the largest proportion of residents living in urban zones. Meanwhile, Indonesia had only 10
million
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 city dwellers, and
Iran
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 had the lowest urban
population
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 at approximately 9
million
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.
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, the number of urban citizens in Russia first increased dramatically to 70
million
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people
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until
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in
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 2015, and since
then
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 it has gone up to 80
million
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. Meanwhile, the city
population
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 in
Iran
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 has grown substantially by 70
million
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, and in Indonesia,
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 indicator has grown by only 20
million
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, showing the lowest urban
population
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.
According to
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 the predictions,
Iran
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’s urban
population
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 will surpass Russia’s urban
population
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 at 95 and 85
million
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, respectively,
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 Indonesia’s urban
population
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 is predicted to remain stable, showing 30
million
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people
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 by the end of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, iran, population, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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