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The charts below show the numbers of people per household in 1990 and 2000 in New Zealand.

The charts below show the numbers of people per household in 1990 and 2000 in New Zealand.
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The pie chart illustrates the number of
people
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 per
household
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 in the range from 1 to 6 in 1990 and 2000 in New Zealand.
Overall
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, it is evident that, in 1990, the top
three
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 family structures were single,
couples
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, and
three
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people
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while
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 the top
three
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 after 20
years
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 contain
couples
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,
three
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people
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, and four
people
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 in the
household
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.
According to
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 the data, there is a similarity that
couples
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 and
three
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-person households are the most popular family structure in both
years
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. The ratio of
three
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people
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 in the
household
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 increased from 21% to 35% over 10
years
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,
while
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 the proportion of
couples
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 remained constant at 31%. It is noteworthy that the ratio of more than 4
people
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household
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 decreased over 10
years
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, which had gaps at 1%, 5%, and 3%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of single-family decreased dramatically from 17% to 2%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, household, three, couples, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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