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The charts below show the numbers of people per household in 1990 and 2000 in New Zealand.

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The pie chart illustrates the number of
people
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 per
household
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 in the range from 1 to 6 in 1990 and 2000 in New Zealand.
Overall
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, it is evident that, in 1990, the top
three
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 family structures were single,
couples
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, and
three
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people
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while
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 the top
three
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 after 20
years
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 contain
couples
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,
three
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people
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, and four
people
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 in the
household
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.
According to
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 the data, there is a similarity that
couples
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 and
three
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-person households are the most popular family structure in both
years
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. The ratio of
three
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people
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 in the
household
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 increased from 21% to 35% over 10
years
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,
while
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 the proportion of
couples
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 remained constant at 31%. It is noteworthy that the ratio of more than 4
people
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household
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 decreased over 10
years
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, which had gaps at 1%, 5%, and 3%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of single-family decreased dramatically from 17% to 2%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, household, three, couples, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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