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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about how several
countries
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 in Europe allocate their total
health
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 expenditure against GDP in 2002, 2007 and 2012. These figures are shown in the form of percentages.
Overall
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, Switzerland became the country
who
Correct pronoun usage
that
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 consistently allocated the most out of
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
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 GDP towards
health
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 purposes with a constant figure of 11%.
On the contrary
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, Estonia put aside the least budget for the same purpose with 3% in all periods. There were several
countries
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who
Correct pronoun usage
that
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 kept these figures stagnant throughout
all
Correct determiner usage
apply
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the years,
such
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 as Belgium, Estonia, Spain and Switzerland, having reported their national
health
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 expenses at 10%, 3%, 8% and 11% respectively.
On the contrary
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, the other
countries
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 showed fluctuations in their figures across the three periods. It can be seen that a notable pattern occurred in four
countries
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 where they increased their allocation towards
health
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 expenses in 2012 in comparison to the previous years, and these
countries
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 are Denmark, Lithuania, Norway and Slovenia.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the contrary".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, health with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • pattern
  • exceptional
  • deviation
  • neighbouring countries
  • economic policies
  • public health
  • data analysis
  • statistical comparison
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