The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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countries
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consumer
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spendings
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spending
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quite different. The table shows the Correct subject-verb agreement
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vary
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items
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ni
the five Correct your spelling
in
countries
, namely, Use synonyms
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Ireland, Italy, Span, Sweden and Turkey in 2002.
Food, drinks and tobacco were in the most important position on Correct your spelling
the
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in all
countries
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ni
a different percentage. Correct your spelling
in
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Ireland and Use synonyms
turkey
. they were near 30%, Capitalize word
Turkey
while
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the other three Correct your spelling
in
countries
they are under 20%.
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important
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most important
consumer
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countries
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Italy, they got 9%, and Use synonyms
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Sweden, they were 54.%. Use synonyms
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the other three Correct your spelling
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were near 6.5%.
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leisure and education. In Turkey, they were 4.35%, and in the other four Change the verb form
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countries
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countries,
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under 4%.
In conclusion, it can be said that in 2002, food, drinks and Change the verb form
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tabaco
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tobacco
consumer
spending in the five Use synonyms
countries
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consumer
spending Use synonyms
were
quite different.
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This
answer focuses on the key features of the information, clearly grouping the Linking Words
countries
, using supporting figures and presenting an overview. Use synonyms
However
, there Linking Words
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no clear reference to what the percentages represent and key comparisons need more expansion.
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although
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ideas are clearly linked and the Correct your spelling
all
overall
progression is achieved by repetition Linking Words
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ni
the final section.
The range of vocabulary is rather narrow and just sufficient for the task. The attempt to paraphrase the rubric shows limited flexibility. There are several spelling and word form errorsCorrect your spelling
in
,
and quite a lot of repetition. Remove the comma
apply
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