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THE LINE GRAPH SHOWS THE ADVERAGE NUMBER OF WEEKLY PATIENTS VISITING FOUR CLINICS OF A HOSPITAL FROM 2010 TO 2016.

THE LINE GRAPH SHOWS THE ADVERAGE NUMBER OF WEEKLY PATIENTS VISITING FOUR CLINICS OF A HOSPITAL FROM 2010 TO 2016.
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The given line graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of patients each week
went
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who went
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 to four different
hospital
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hospitals
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 between 2010 to 2016.
Overall
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, it can be seen that birth control had the highest and
in contrast
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 to it was the birth control with the lowest. The two others show the
adverage
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average
 number. Looking at the figures in detail, we can see that in the first year birth control was on the top at nearly 250
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 it had a steady rise in the next 2 years at 270. After
that
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 it went down to 180 in 2014 and went up to 240 in 2016. At the same time, in 2010
diabetic
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diabetes
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 stood at 60 and from 2010 to 2014 there was a noticeable
climbing
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at
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 nearly 90
then
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 in the next 2 years it jumped up to 135. Turning to the remaining, dental accounted for 100 in 2010
then
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 decreased
at
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 50 in 2012.
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, in 2014 it
rised
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raised
rose
 to 125 and continued to increase to 130. The eye had
medium
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the medium
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 number at 125
then
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 in 2012 it jumped up to 150. Over the
last
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 4 years, it continuously reached
a
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the
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 highest top at 300.

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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jumped" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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