Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport system such as railways and trams.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The majority of
people
often think that spend
Wrong verb form
spending
money
on motorways and roads are
more crucial than Correct subject-verb agreement
is
spend
Wrong verb form
spending
in
public Change preposition
on
transport
like trams and railways.This
author disagrees with this
statement due to
causing air
pollution
and preventing poor people
to go
to the countryside.
It must be understood that spending Change preposition
from going
money
on public
Correct article usage
the public
transport
system is very crucial due to
reducing the
Correct article usage
apply
air
pollution
.This
means motorbike
and vehicles Fix the agreement mistake
motorbikes
are
release Unnecessary verb
apply
much
smoke than Correct quantifier usage
more
train
or public Fix the agreement mistake
trains
transport
.Consequently
,causing air
pollution
as well as
global warming.For example
,if the bus can contain under 40 people
,it is release
Wrong verb form
releases
lack
of pollutants than 40 Correct article usage
a lack
people
who own each motorbike
.
Another factors
that Replace the adjective
Another factor
Other factors
government
should settle on Correct article usage
the government
public
Add a missing verb
is public
transport
due to
it create
more opportunities to help Wrong verb form
creating
pollution
go to their countryside.In other words
,there is lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
people
who can own a motorbike
or vehicles
.Fix the agreement mistake
vehicle
Moreover
,some people
do not have ability
to move.Change the article
the ability
Therefore
,we should spend on public transport
to create more opportunities for folk to go back Change preposition
to the
the
hometown .Take poor Change the word
their
people
for instance
,they do not have enough money
to own a car or a motorbike
,even the
bicycle,they just can depend on public Correct article usage
a
transport
to visit their home town and meet their families and relatives.Furthermore
,citizen
who lose the ability to walk or move,Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
they
can not use Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
vehicles like others,Correct article usage
apply
just
Correct word choice
and just
can
depend on the public Verb problem
apply
transport
system.
In conclusion,allocate
Wrong verb form
allocating
money
in
Change preposition
to
public
Add an article
the public
transport
system is the best ways
to prevent Fix the agreement mistake
way
air
pollution
and create a chance for citizen
to come Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
bake
Verb problem
back to
the
Change the word
their
hometown
.Fix the agreement mistake
hometowns
Hence
,encourage people
to protect environment
and help others.Add an article
the environment
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coherence
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task
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task
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task
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task
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task
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coherence
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