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Band 4.5

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport system such as railways and trams.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The majority of
people
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 often think that
spend
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spending
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money
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 on motorways and roads
are
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is
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 more crucial than
spend
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spending
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in
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on
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 public
transport
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 like trams and railways.
This
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 author disagrees with
this
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 statement
due to
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 causing
air
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pollution
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 and preventing poor
people
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to go
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from going
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 to the countryside. It must be understood that spending
money
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 on
public
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the public
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transport
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 system is very crucial
due to
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 reducing
the
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air
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pollution
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.
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 means
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motorbike
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motorbikes
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 and vehicles
are
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release
much
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more
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 smoke than
train
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trains
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 or public
transport
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.
Consequently
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,causing
air
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pollution
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as well as
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 global warming.
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,if the bus can contain under 40
people
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,it
is release
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releases
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lack
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a lack
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 of pollutants than 40
people
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 who own each
motorbike
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.
Another factors
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 that
government
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the government
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 should settle on
public
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is public
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transport
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due to
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 it
create
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creating
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 more opportunities to help
pollution
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 go to their countryside.
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,there is
lack
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a lack
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 of
people
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 who can own a
motorbike
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 or
vehicles
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vehicle
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.
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,some
people
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 do not have
ability
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the ability
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 to move.
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,we should spend on public
transport
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 to create more opportunities for folk to go back
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to the
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the
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their
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 hometown .Take poor
people
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for instance
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,they do not have enough
money
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 to own a car or a
motorbike
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,even
the
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a
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 bicycle,they just can depend on public
transport
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 to visit their home town and meet their families and relatives.
Furthermore
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,
citizen
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citizens
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 who lose the ability to walk or move,
they
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apply
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 can not use
the
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apply
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vehicles like others,
just
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and just
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can
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apply
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depend on the public
transport
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 system. In conclusion,
allocate
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allocating
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money
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in
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to
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public
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the public
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transport
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 system is the best
ways
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way
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 to prevent
air
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pollution
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 and create a chance for
citizen
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citizens
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 to come
bake
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back to
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the
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their
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hometown
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hometowns
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.
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,encourage
people
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 to protect
environment
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the environment
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 and help others.

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coherence
Work on improving the logical structure of your essay. Your arguments should flow naturally from one to another, rather than feeling disjointed. Consider using transition words and phrases to help with this.
coherence
The introduction and conclusion are present but could be stronger. Make sure they clearly summarize the main points of your essay and restate your position convincingly.
task
Use specific and relevant examples to support your main points more effectively. The examples you use should directly relate to your argument and help to illustrate your points clearly.
task
Try to articulate your ideas more clearly. Make sure your sentences are easy to understand and your ideas are expressed logically.
task
Address the task more completely by considering potential counterarguments and refuting them where necessary. This will show a nuanced understanding of the topic.
task
You have chosen a clear stance on the issue and have presented arguments to support your position.
task
Your essay demonstrates an understanding of the topic, which is an important aspect of task achievement.
coherence
Your conclusion attempts to summarize your points and restate your position, which is good practice.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • economic efficiency
  • transport of goods and services
  • infrastructure
  • accidents
  • environmental impact
  • individual vehicles
  • affordable and accessible transportation
  • construction and maintenance
  • stimulate the economy
  • sustainable
  • urban development
  • urban sprawl
  • higher-density
  • public transport systems
  • motorways
  • railways
  • trams
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