Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport system such as railways and trams.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The majority of
people
often think that Use synonyms
spend
Wrong verb form
spending
money
on motorways and roads Use synonyms
are
more crucial than Correct subject-verb agreement
is
spend
Wrong verb form
spending
in
public Change preposition
on
transport
like trams and railways.Use synonyms
This
author disagrees with Linking Words
this
statement Linking Words
due to
causing Linking Words
air
Use synonyms
pollution
and preventing poor Use synonyms
people
Use synonyms
to go
to the countryside.
It must be understood that spending Change preposition
from going
money
on Use synonyms
public
Correct article usage
the public
transport
system is very crucial Use synonyms
due to
reducing Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
air
Use synonyms
pollution
.Use synonyms
This
means Linking Words
Use synonyms
motorbike
and vehicles Fix the agreement mistake
motorbikes
are
release Unnecessary verb
apply
much
smoke than Correct quantifier usage
more
train
or public Fix the agreement mistake
trains
transport
.Use synonyms
Consequently
,causing Linking Words
air
Use synonyms
pollution
Use synonyms
as well as
global warming.Linking Words
For example
,if the bus can contain under 40 Linking Words
people
,it Use synonyms
is release
Wrong verb form
releases
lack
of pollutants than 40 Correct article usage
a lack
people
who own each Use synonyms
motorbike
.
Use synonyms
Another factors
that Replace the adjective
Another factor
Other factors
government
should settle on Correct article usage
the government
public
Add a missing verb
is public
transport
Use synonyms
due to
it Linking Words
create
more opportunities to help Wrong verb form
creating
pollution
go to their countryside.Use synonyms
In other words
,there is Linking Words
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
people
who can own a Use synonyms
motorbike
or Use synonyms
vehicles
.Fix the agreement mistake
vehicle
Moreover
,some Linking Words
people
do not have Use synonyms
ability
to move.Change the article
the ability
Therefore
,we should spend on public Linking Words
transport
to create more opportunities for folk to go back Use synonyms
Change preposition
to the
the
hometown .Take poor Change the word
their
people
Use synonyms
for instance
,they do not have enough Linking Words
money
to own a car or a Use synonyms
motorbike
,even Use synonyms
the
bicycle,they just can depend on public Correct article usage
a
transport
to visit their home town and meet their families and relatives.Use synonyms
Furthermore
,Linking Words
citizen
who lose the ability to walk or move,Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
they
can not use Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
vehicles like others,Correct article usage
apply
just
Correct word choice
and just
can
depend on the public Verb problem
apply
transport
system.
In conclusion,Use synonyms
allocate
Wrong verb form
allocating
money
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
to
public
Add an article
the public
transport
system is the best Use synonyms
ways
to prevent Fix the agreement mistake
way
air
Use synonyms
pollution
and create a chance for Use synonyms
citizen
to come Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
bake
Verb problem
back to
the
Change the word
their
hometown
.Fix the agreement mistake
hometowns
Hence
,encourage Linking Words
people
to protect Use synonyms
environment
and help others.Add an article
the environment
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coherence
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task
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task
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task
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task
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task
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coherence
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