the chart below give information on the number of workers in different occupatons who migrated to Australia between 2009 and 2012.
The bar chart
illustrate
information related to the number of migrants who chose four dissimilar jobs in Australia from 2009 to 2012. The figures are shown in Change the verb form
illustrates
thousand
.
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thousands
Overall
, it can be seen that there was an upward trend of workers
in accountant
and computer Fix the agreement mistake
accountants
programmer
, the opposite was Fix the agreement mistake
programmers
truth
for Replace the word
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cook
and software Fix the agreement mistake
cooks
engineer
. Fix the agreement mistake
engineers
Additionally
, in 2009 witnessed the highest point of worker
in Fix the agreement mistake
workers
accountant
throughout the whole period.
Looking at the data closely, accountants explored 20 Fix the agreement mistake
accountants
thousand
workers
in 2009, a figure that significant
sire to 28 Change the word
significantly
thousand
, making this
a substantial difference in the following year. After 2 years, it suddenly decreased about
7 Change preposition
to about
thousand
workers
. Furthermore
, there was an
downward trend in Change the article
a
cook
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cooking
initial
amount of 17 Add an article
an initial
the initial
thousand
human labors
by 2009 before a Replace the word
labourers
slightly falling
and levelling up at 18 Replace the word
slight fall
thousand
workers
in both 2010 and 2011, then
it moderate drop less
than 2 units Change preposition
of less
in
the end of Change the preposition
at
timeframe
.
Turning to the remaining statistics, software Add an article
the timeframe
engineer
saw a marginal increase during 3 years before having a decline to 17 Fix the agreement mistake
engineers
thousand
workers
. In contrast
, computer programmer
experienced the lowest values of human Fix the agreement mistake
programmers
labors
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labor
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apply
through
the entire period, with Change preposition
throughout
initial
figure under 5 units, Correct article usage
an initial
then
the values saw a steady rise with over a double in 2012.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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