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The bar chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.

The bar chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
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The bar chart,
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illustrates the percentage change in the average residential
prices
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 in five cities, namely New York (USA), Madrid (Spain),
Tokyo
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 (Japan), Frankfurt (Germany), and
London
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 (UK) from 1990 to 2002, compared with those in the year 1989.
Overall
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, it is evident that there was a fluctuating trend in average housing
prices
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 observed in all presented cities, with
London
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 showing the highest
increase
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 among them
According to
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 the bar graph, from 1990 to 1995, the
prices
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 of homes in New York decreased by 5%,
while
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 in Madrid they increased by roughly 2%.
Next,
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in
Tokyo
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, there was a dramatic decrease of around -7% to 8%.
Moreover
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, in Frankfurt,
prices
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 rose by approximately 3%.
Finally
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, in
London
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, there was
also
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 a significant drop, close to that of
Tokyo
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, around 7% to 8% during the same period. Interestingly, over the period 1996-2002, the cost of houses in New York saw a slight
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 of 5%,
whereas
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 in Spain, there was
also
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 an
increase
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 of around 2% compared to the period from 1990 to 1995 when there was a 4%
increase
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. As seen, in
Tokyo
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, there was a considerable drop of roughly -5%.
Additionally
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, in Frankfurt,
prices
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 rose by approximately 2%. Notably, there was a significant
increase
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 of around 12% in
London
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, tokyo, london, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • real estate market
  • average house prices
  • economic factors
  • base year
  • significant increase/decrease
  • period of stability
  • peak and trough
  • real estate development
  • population growth
  • relative comparison
  • speculate
  • anomalies
  • timeframe
  • trend analysis
  • market dynamics
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