The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of four groups of vacationers considered by their region in one resort and the table presents the data of each group.
Overall
,
it is clear that
most tourists are
Europe
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from Europe
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and Asia
while
people from the other region
is
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are
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the least.
Moreover
, tourists from different regions have their own preferences but both Asians and Americans are interested to a see the sights. On the one hand, the fraction of Asians in an Australian resort occupied a gigantic 37% followed by Europeans which was a massive 35%. The US region was seen in third place with 18% and the individuals from other regions registered a petite 10%. What is interesting to note is the US is less than both Asia and Europe around two times.
On the other hand
, the information shows that Asian travellers
loved
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to stay 7 days in a 5-star hotel and their main activity is sightseeing.
Next,
Europeans stayed in a resort longest and mostly went
to
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apply
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camping or caravan;
as well as
, swimming and sunbathing. The American tourists interested in sightseeing as the same as Asians;
on the contrary
, they rested for approximately 14 days in a 4-star hotel.
Finally
, vacationers from other regions are keen on going camping and caravan. What is surprising to see is travellers from Asia and the USA had the same activity and Europe and others stayed in the same accommodation.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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